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Flora, I did not like this poem. It is too sterotypical for my tastes and to me, it feels like a rewrite of the ideas that already exist in our ...

Hi there Pie. First of all, I like to say that I didn't like this piece because of one reason: It isn't creative. To me, you basically took a common ...

Ok Flora, first of all, I'm not a fan of critiquing poetry simply because poetry is a very diverse art form and hence takes a lot of effort to review. ...

Hi there Ayra. Alright, I have read most of your fantasies that you've posted on the fantasy forum, and I have to say that there is something that bugs me ...

Hey Jiggity. First off, I like to say that I really like this. The way you worded this story was simply one of the best that I've seen on yws. ...

Hey there flyingdream. I had mixed feelings about this piece. I think it was ok but after taking my advice into incosideration and revising it, it would be quite good. ...

Hey LAF. I'll start off by saying that I have no idea on whether or not I liked this piece. There were some good aspects in this piece and some ...

I think this chapter was ok. Your writing style seems good but what really bogged it down was that it was so reliant on dialogue to tell a story. The ...

Hi black cat, nice avatar by the way. Hamtaro for the win. I won't say much but I would agree with BBB. The voice in this was good but it ...

Hi Mantis. I believe I had already told you what I thought of this prologue so I'll repeat it here. Firstly, your writing style flows very well and your descriptions, ...

Sup BBB. Alright, when I got about half way through your story, one word sprang into my mind: Cliche. Of all the horror movies I have seen or read, there ...

Hi there. Your writing style was pretty good and the story flows along quite nicely. Your descriptions were very well done too. Careful wording and care to detail allowed me ...

Hey LAf. Well this part of the chapter actually caught my attention. The characters in this part were much more intruging than those in the previous part. I like how ...

Hey Starrynight. Since you aren't looking for spelling and grammer corrections, I think I will not do that (between you and me, I'm no grammer king myself :) ) Ok ...

Hi Little Angel Fire :) Stylistically, this was well written. You used your words well and allows me to picture the story quite easily as I read. It is also ...