SpiritedWolfe

Jay. I will say now that this is not a particularly helpful review. It would do them much better to mention once that they need to place spaces after periods ...

That makes sense :P (Of course, I knew none of this and reviewed it as an actual story xD)

I appreciate you pointing out some wording mistakes, but I don't need critique on grammar, and sorry to say, but this didn't help that much, very little even. I mean, ...

I just reread this today, and I soooo thank you for all this advice, even if I didn't understand it before ~ I finally get what you're saying about enjambement ...

The title name isn't a point of critique xD

Oh, and the title. Uh, I don't know why I chose it xD Sam has fire Syrin, so I wanted fire in there and I wanted something to do with ...

Yeah, it was just a probably over loaded sentence to say Sam was annoyed xD Thanks for the review! I was a bit iffy with the parenthesis, trying something a ...

Thanks for the review! Yeah, the porch scene was a little rough >.< And watch Marrian's character in the next few parts would you? Because I think I'm slipping away ...

I actually have read the first book xD So I understood what things like Sandwings were. Was Moon the Nightwing?

Thanks for the review! Yeah. This isn't one of my strongest chapters >.< The plan was created more in the last chapter, and here it was just added on some.

An ellipse is this: "..." Those series of three dots (or sometimes two dots here). I also realize I say ellipses are too prominent in the dialogue, when I meant ...

Yep, you got it, Lily.

You disappoint me.

Nope xD Only 2,500 ish characters isn't long.

True, but the silence part and her favorite color aren't made known throughout this. But your call.