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I really loved this. The only critique I could do has nothing to do with wording and more to do with how this works musically. But obviously I cannot help ...

It's pretty and emotional,, and dramatic. I loved it. I agree that the title didn't totally fit, but your imagery was impeccable, so just mess with the title a little. ...

Agreed big-time about the sentence fragments. They are like many peices of different puzzles all thrown together. the hooks and holes cannot connect. Flow is interupted when you have to ...

I agree that the topic is not clearly defined. I have a bit of an idea, but that's only because I read it three times then came too my own ...

But what is that something bigger, a few of the good people in the world might be inclined to ask themselves or perhaps someone else. Long sentence. Too long. It ...

Hm. No glaring flaws. I really did like it, it was well-written, and you did wonderfully with the dialogue, something I struggle with. However, at first your main character wasn't ...

This was a good peice. I really liked the way it flowed and it seemed very 'real'. I, horribel wretch that I am, loved the ending. The fact that the ...

'Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!!! First off, can I just compliment you on your title. Offbeat, yet accurate, just how I like em! You are an established writer. I can see that ...

It's wonderfully intriguing and you have this way with words. Sort of quirky and dark. Like evryone else is looking from above and you're there, peeking out from under the ...