Sonlen

I don't really get the idea yet, but I can sorta tell where this is going, and from what I've inferred, it's gonna be good. Your main problem are spelling ...

I wipe my face with the back of my hand. The salty moisture burn where it touches my skin. No one has seen me like this before. I think about ...

Hiyas!!! It's me again, well, here we go!!! Firstly, you're still having trouble using quotes correctly, just put this into Word and go to grammar check to correct it. Secondly, ...

The Princess’s Dragons Many years in past In a place so far away Lives a story that will last For generations it will stay It tells of a princess dear ...

There might be a few grammar mistakes but I tried to edit it. You make me sad. You make me mad. You make me cry. You make me want to ...

Wait... how are you exactly supposed to cry so as to get tears on said rose? Ya know, that was completely pointless to put that here, I'm guessing that it ...

"Villain who likes to laugh..." Judging by Paolini's plagiaristic track record, this is the new villain: The Joker. Wait--no, the Jokar. There. Now it's original. The Jokar is a laughing ...

Okay, it's kind of confusing overall, I still don't get why she was kidnapped or by who, or the basic storyline, it's all kind of, well, very confusing. Also in ...

Mmmkay, It is kind of confusing, but a prologue or more info later in the story could fix that. And already is already, not all ready. Only other thing is ...

You don't need to use ALL CAPS for exclamation in a lot of places, firstly. Also a bit after the beginning of the chapter everything starts to blur together, it ...

Yes, it is improper grammar to have two different people speaking in the same paragraph. Also, you need to figure out how to use quotation marks, instead of putting “Sisters” ...