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I liked the little detail of "off-brand corn flakes". It made me smile and also was yet another clue to how tight they are on money. The fact that Toby ...

Oh man! In the first part of this chapter, it was like everything was turned on it's head! And yet I think Toby's mom does somehow care about him specifically, ...

The seagulls. Wow, the seagulls just made the chapter for me. They're the perfect detail, and they set such a perfect tone. I can hear their calls as they fly...perhaps ...

Oh man, just an anxiety attack. You really had me there. I had totally thought his heart was failing again, so the beginning of this chapter gave me a sense ...

Hahaha, I laughed at all the cards he got. At first, I thought, "Wow, he must've been really popular," but then I read that it was a class assignment and ...

Oh man, I'm a sucker for dream sequences, and that dream was particularly fascinating! It definitely has a powerful sense of meaning something. Feeling someone pat you on the back, ...

Uh, wow. I'm assuming there's a reason the nurse was so alarmed when Toby woke up. They must not have been expecting him to wake up! Either that, or the ...

I started reading this story because the name caught my eye. ^_^ I'm excited about a 10-year-old protagonist going to school--that is, I think I'll really enjoy the setting. Susie ...

Ooh! Wow, they found the second lock! So, then, all of these locks will transform into different things with different powers? Interesting! Of course, it makes me want to see ...

When Meredith seemed afraid that Lav would hit her, that really affected me. You can see a lot of her past in that one, small detail. Lav was only vaguely ...

Still loving your story, and your characters, and your little descriptions. Every once in a while, I'll get a really strong mental image, like when the wind blew Lav over ...

Oh my goodness, Atsmai. The name of this poem caught my attention because I'm currently seeing a psychiatrist for anxiety issues--but I didn't think this would hit home so deeply. ...

Yaay! I get to read the missing pieces of "The Locksmith"! I'm excited. I really like the story and the setting, and I really like Lav. Her reaction to her ...

This is...amazingly gripping. I'm really just trying to figure it out, and such unexpected things happen. The last sentence of the first part, implying that he died, caught me by ...

Excellent...This is so impactful, and so honest. It doesn't try to smooth over the violence, but exposes it, raw and real. Yet at the same time, it's also from the ...