Sometimesinbetween

Wow, what a powerful poem! Not many poems hold my attention, but this one did all the way through! Great job! He watched in horror as some tried to run ...

This is basically good. The end left a little to be desired. What did he do with the gun? Commit suicide? Kill somebody? Just the fact that he had a ...

So true! I love this poem! The only thing that didn't flow well for me (the rest went beautifully!) was the third line, but that could just be a matter ...

Oh wow. Hilarious! I loved it! The only thing I caught was this: Briana clickity-clacked her trendy heels out of the classroom, leaving me stranded there in the desk, staring ...

Wow, I really love this! You did an excellent job! There's nothing much I can critique on, I just wanted to say great job! :D Nearly scared the shavings out ...

I really liked this! :) The only thing I caught was this: I wait to the temple and kneel to Juno Was it supposed to be 'at' the temple rather ...

This was pretty good! I didn't see anything wrong with the grammer or puncuation. :) Is there more? I hope so! :D -Sometimes-

This was very well written! :D However, I think you should space out your paragraphs. Also, when a new person is talking you need a new paragraph. :) PM if ...

I liked it! I love so much the chocolate sensation, These candies deserve a standing ovation! I loved this part! :D No more chocolate, this moment i dread You need ...

This was pretty good! :) I knew I should have, but I couldn’t help myself. Did you mean 'should n't have'? “I never thought I’d have to tell a teenage ...

This was pretty good. It had a neat feel to it. I have to say I didn't really understand it. :oops: And yes, I do think it needs puncuation. Great ...

Wow, I really liked this. It was beautifully written. He had left the house a bit earlier that day, Try saying 'a bit earlier than usual that day' Otherwise it ...

This was very well written. Now to answer your questions: 1. Did it catch my attention? It was ok... I think you could make it a bit more interesting. Marvelous ...

This is my friend's critique (she's a band geek :D ) technically i resent the remarks made but i see where you're coming from. wind band is a little more ...

This was really good! It flowed very nicely except for one part. All of the stanzas except for the second and third have no punctuation other than a period at ...