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HA! I changed one sentence which makes this story that much better! ... I'm so lame.

LOL! It's just an idea. She can tweak his identity however she feels fit. ;) I just like soppy teenager stories, so...

Haha, you do that Crysi. Another idea: right now, you have it in third person. It appears to us that the main character is the janitor, but at the moment, ...

Or hot-doggin' craziness... Wait, that sounds weird. YAY! My bloggie was mentioned! This is one of your most random stories/poems/whatevers yet. You should feel immensely proud of yourself.

Hehe! This only means one thing... I might become a poet yet! :D

Hahah! That was one of my first thoughts! ... but my sister was using the computer at the time soOo...

This part is begging to be a prologue: The bay was only visible through a fracture of light that escaped through the billowing purple clouds, its black waters clasped the ...

I like the title. It's original and kind of fun. Just delete the (Working Title) part after it. The story also looks rather original. ...would I scare you if I ...

anyway now thanks to you i will have to wait until the end of the year for BOTH of his stories, i was only here to read his stories, so ...

Read this. And for goodness's sake... don't think you're alone. I've written worse things than this. By asking for a critique, especially from smaur and I, you're asking to have ...

hehe. I was waiting for this. In fact it was the main reason I moved the story to this Forum, because I know you tend to read more story's here ...

Wow... this is confusing. It's ecstasy, by the way. Weird word, eh? Don't put quotation marks around Eve. And this is really weird stuff...

Well, Emily is in an odd situation. Her parents *do* love her and everything, so she isn't exactly living in fear all her life. She is a bit of a ...

Apparently, it's a thesis statement...

Fine, except... it's spelled "Memoirs" if you're refering to memories. It's French.