Snoink

Hehehe... I didn't see this before! How about "Hellfire" as a name?

*glee* So basically what you wrote in your critique was that this part... She saw a unicorn. The unicorn was outside just below the streetlight, jumping up and down on ...

OMG! I love that story! *automatically gives A++++++* Nice rhyming job! I'm impressed. :)

Very sensual, but not much of a moving point. The clarinet produces a beautiful sound, and I think you could express it better. Give it more suspence, Snoikums. It's not ...

XD What grammatical errors? :P

DON'T EDIT IT. Otherwise, I will sic the pigs on you.

I looked up "limned." :P You still might want to change the word so it's not so confounded. And hehe! You can be subtle and detached. What you want to ...

Hehehe... first actually concentrates more on the character actually, methinks. And the week long diary isn't too bad! :P I know when I started writing in third person, I absolutely ...

Well.. yeah. Grif! Capitalize "will!" And... haha. Will Smith should TOTALLY be a member of SPEW. Skunk go boom!

...who's Will? I wanna fire at him! But really. Bugs? Meh! It's time for the MIB to get involved... now, who wears black? Ah yes... Sam. And by Sam, I ...

Aw! I automatically love any short poem that has something to do with write. :)

Me? Carried away? Never! But, if this is a SPEW story, we might as well have proper grammar! :D

The only thing I had a problem with was the mention of tone holes. It took me out of the image of a real person and broke the magic for ...

You write so prettily. :)

Changed to fit Snoinks critique. See? That's what I'm talking about. Snoink's critique. It's MY critique, so therefore it's possessive. :)