Snoink

Well, whatever you decide, I'll read it! XD

Hehe! Nah, it's probably not just you. The only problem is I'm not quite sure how to fix it and make it sparklier. *sighs* I'll figure out something... Haha... FREAK's ...

XD Yay! Okay, I've changed the "cleaning" sentence into something that's a little prettier, I think. Plus, like, five million people noticed that, and when I reread it, it was ...

Haha... well, it IS a sci fi. So who knows? Maybe there will be mysterious crop circles that pop up? ;)

Just remember... I don't want to be in this story. At all.

Well, sucks then. :P

*stabs past tense* Ah, one day, it will be completely pretty! And I think I put that comma there to add the next clause, almost as an afterthought, if that ...

Haha... All right is correct. There is no such word as "alright." If you looked in Strunk and White...

The title should be this: "Beginning of Till Death's Acceptance"

OMG! CASSANDRA LIKED MY STORY! *runs around babbling and hits into wall* Er... yeah. YAY! For the first part (the thingy about the virgins) thought the same thing, it being ...

Ahhh... well, hopefully my creative writing teacher will help me with that paragraph, though I think she'll be kept pleasantly busy by the other writers in our class. O_o Thanks ...

HAHA! GO CRYSI! AND SAPHIRUS! XD By the way, Crysi, expect a similar story where Claude politically manipulates people into forcing Crysi to write poetry... ;)

Poe? He's a little wordy, lol. But I don't know! Maybe so? Hey... that rhymes! And thank you very much. It's good to know that my day was not spent ...

Thank you very much! I've been working on this quite a bit today, and any comments are much appreciated. :D

OKAY! I cleaned up some of the suckitude and made it more sparkly. Better?