Snoink

Interesting... *smiles and backs away*

*LOCKED*

*Moved to Fantasy Fiction*

The most awesome, amazing character of all were Lena's breasts. They were characterized incredibly well. ^_^ And yay! SPEW will take over the world some day...

Well, I'm glad you got your 1. Since you got what you wanted, I'm going to lock this. I hope we might have helped. ^_^ *LOCKED*

This seems too much like a list. Don't worry about constricting your poem into a particular format -- let your soul pour out. It'll be much prettier that way.

This story seems incomplete. I think a better ending would be when the princess comes back to her kingdom.

Um... I read this a couple of months ago, but apparently I didn't comment. So I will! I liked this poem. It was pretty. :)

Well... where's the story part in it? You at least got to get to the story. :P

Okay, so I read this really early in the morning and then fell asleep. This gave me THE WEIRDEST DREAM EVER. With that said, the obscure sexual WTF! stuff was ...

***Moved to Lyrics***

This is much too preachy to be considered anything but a rant. Perhaps you can try a little symbolism or metaphor to make it seem like you're not slamming your ...

This poem rhymes, but it doesn't really say anything. Focus more on your meaning more than the rhyming--that's what matters anyway. ;)

Hahaha, so that's why! We love forced rhyming. ;) And love, love is the reason why my heart chokes back her shattered sigh. ^ There are a lot of things ...

Dude, this is so old, it's not even funny. I wasn't even around YWS then! XD But really. You and your sandwiches. You're crazy! XD