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Plot-wise, this sucked. You had no premise other than "treason," which without a timeframe is utterly pointless. :D You miss the point. Whom does he report for treason? But this ...

I saw this on TYWC, and I still like it, especially the ending. It works because as it goes on, it sounds soppier and soppier until finally - BAM! - ...

OooOh. I actually liked this! Sometimes the rhythms seemed a little forced, but I liked the imagery and the story very much. Good job!

I liked it! Of course, my opinion about poetry is essentially meaningless, but I did like the descriptions drawn up about Jesus. It's not the usual stuff about Him being ...