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Hey Adeera! I'm guessing that you want us to tell you which one we liked and why, so that's what I am going to do! :D First off, I liked ...

Hey Sunny! Welcome to YWS! :D First off, a typo! I could barely use a computer, let alone identify it's parts. The word "it's" should be "its". Also, I'm a ...

This might sound weird, but at first I thought this was funny and then, as it continued on, it just seemed rather sad. I mean, the person seems absolutely crazy. ...

Mwha! More reason why science is poetry! But you already knew that. Anyway, when I first read this, I thought, "Huh?" because although I knew how to derive this, it ...

Have I ever told you how much I love your avatar? The lads are HYPNOTIZING. And no, I am not going to critique everything you write just because of The ...

Yay! Welcome to YWS! :D Hmm... I agree with Esther! You'll want to spice this one up. One thing I would love to see, for example, is a description of ...

I kind of expected that ending, actually. :P My main comment would be the narrator... I don't know who the narrator is. It sounds like it is an encompassing nature ...

Hey originalhobbit! First of all, you might want to check for typos again... there's one in the first line which is a bit glaring. ;) Now! For your poem! One ...

Hey Lilicia! :D I like the idea! I would like a little more depth though... a lot of things can happen in a minute! :o One way which you can ...

Hahahaha.... I kind of adore Chloe and her maniac nature. XD I think you could possibly make this better by describing Chloe and your narrator a bit better in the ...

Dun dun dunnnnn! Just a comment... he would totally smell the smell of rotting flesh before he spotted the person. I don't know if you've ever smelled something rot before? ...

Woo! First poem! :D Right now, it looks like you keep on repeating the same thing over again... the real me vs. the perceived me. An interesting idea... but I ...

That sheep must be the leader. XD I might be mistaken, but don't sheep use their hooves when attacking? So maybe you can add that IF that even happens. If ...

Okay! So I noticed you had posted your second chapter, so I figured I would comment on this and then the second chapter, lol. I don't like the dream sequence. ...

Hey AutumnSun! :D Just one short comment! Basically, I think this poem can be broken up into two parts -- the part where they are in love and the part ...