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Ooh! Nice poem. :D It seems a little... misarranged though! Try this: She’s not calling for help. Her peripheral vision has worn away from ages of staring down at ivory ...

Hey jDawn! You did a couple of grammar mistakes, so I'm just going to point them out really quickly! :) The rabbit turned it's vibrant blue eyes on me, a ...

OM NOM NOM. More story! Hmmm... for some reason, I really don't like Mona. I mean, she just doesn't act realistic, at least to me. Maybe it's because Californians are ...

Hey Isha! We don't understand what a Forgotten is until too long. I think you should introduce Bailey bumping into her author or something of the sort. That might be ...

Haha, I kind of adore the description of the character with the scar crinkling when he smiles. That's awesome. It's not so much as the description that I adore, it's ...

I love this story so much. XD Also! It looked really fun to edit. Really fun. So I edited, using Track Changes, of course. What I did, mainly was reformat ...

Dude, your title rocks so hard that it's amazing. Anyway, for the first five stanzas, I thought it sounded too much like a cheerleader. Not that sounding like a cheerleader ...

I know what I've been missing all my life! More of Sachi's writing! This was loverly! Very touching and wonderful. My main point against this piece is there isn't enough ...

Hey Aiden! This seems more like a monologue than a story. Or maybe a love letter of sorts by a spurned lover who has nothing to lose, but again not ...

OMG, a new poem by wisemann210?! :o So, I liked this for the most part! The first three lines are full of awesome. It's the last two lines that looked ...

Hey, smashles! :D A very catchy tune! I imagine it as a kind of poppy song. The repetition totally works for it too, which is completely awesome. One thing that ...

So! I don't know if you're still interested in this poem or not, but since I bugged you, I figured I would give you a critique. :) This was an ...

Hey, hobbit! I'm not sure... one of the bad parts about putting a blog into poetry is that blogs are essentially passionate rants that don't necessarily make sense... and when ...

The tunnel lights turned green and Grif thought of the horizon. What exactly do you mean by this? The Gryphon's thrusters fired This is sooooo dirty. "Let's get out of ...

Your title is fantastic! It was the thing that drew me into reading this. :) Now, let's talk about the evil stepmother, right? She is obviously very evil. She is ...