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Hey disco! Okay, so I am not familiar with this contest, but I am guessing this is a dark humor contest? In any case, I can't see this story as ...

Hey Lilly! :D So! I can tell that you really love adjectives and adverbs! And that's good... adjectives and adverbs, when used properly, can be beautiful things! But there is ...

Hey Margaret! :D One thing that I think you can work on in this poem is the overall intensity. It's a very quiet poem... maybe a bit too quiet! Every ...

First of all, your title is incredibly awesome. It's catchy and interesting and makes you do a double-take...completely awesome! Now, your poem! I love how it's narrated by a sneaky ...

Hahaha, I hate your character for the simple fact that she has all these interviews. XD You may want to change the line about her curing cancer... it's unrealistic, given ...

This is five kinds of awesome. I loved reading it -- out loud, of course. ;) My only nit-pick is that some of the things would probably not be said, ...

Hey Dots! Okay, so you said you liked harsh edits? Hopefully I'm not too harsh! I got this far before I became disinterested in the story: Ring, Ring. I grabbed ...

Oy, calm down everyone. If someone does indeed make a completely useless comment, or make an excessively harsh comment, please contact a moderator (we're the guys in the green names). ...

Sorry, I'm kind of late. ^^ Ahh! I hate it when you fall in love with your best friend. So, so, so awkward! On the plus side, sometimes they realize ...

Haha, I was going to point out that it was a senryu. XD Anyway, I don't like the use of "so." I mean, I know that you were trying to ...

Teehee! The first paragraph has so much awesomeness that it's hard to say how awesome it is. It's THIS awesome though. *flails* Anyway! :D You have this here! The town ...

Hmm... I'm not sure how you plan on continuing this story, but I'm tempted to say that you should probably make this less of a summary and flesh it out ...

halves lie titled like beached boats.

OMG. Yes. That piece was awesome, I remember. And I remember thinking of the same thing that you wrote a poem about. XD Anyway, your poem! There's something lacking in ...

Don't worry, we have a bunch of non-native English speakers here. I will remind you to put "you" for "u" but generally, you were fine. :) The conclusion kind of ...