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Eek! Genetics. I'll be taking my first genetics class tomorrow. :D Anyway, one thing I would really like it is if you could expand on it. Yes, yes, I think ...

Eek, sorry I am so late! I didn't see this till now. :( I'm going to make my comments general so that you can have some advice for your next ...

Hi kaiden! :D Oh my... the words "unedited" make me quake! But really, this was pretty good! I only found one typo: You see, it’s been a while since a ...

Hi BlackDahlia! :D First of all, you don't need to have the quotes... really! The neat thing about poetry is that narrations don't really need quotes. It's rather different from ...

Hi Demoness! :D One thing that I was wondering about when I read this... you said that they died for love, but I really couldn't see any love in this ...

Hello! :D For one, I really liked the uncapitalized style. If you did it any other why, I think it would look too annoying! At least for me. If it ...

Hey watch! You wanted me to look at this, so here I am! :D I looked at the small bottle of pills next to me and felt an icy shiver ...

Dun dun dun! I think I almost wrote a story like this a while ago. But, I was lazy and didn't want to start it. So I'm glad that the ...

Hey Pigeon! :D First of all, I would totally rearrange your poem to look like this! Walking down forty-second street There are a thousand, thousand feet; All of them marching ...

Hey Patrick! :D One thing I would like to see is a little bit more... conflict, if that makes sense. You kind of have the conflict set in the middle. ...

Eek! Love the idea with the Matryoshka doll. :) First of all! It comes seeking it's reflection

Hi Emilie! You've gotten a lot of advice so far, so I hope I'm not repeating the other comments! I haven't read the previous comments, so I probably am. Sorry ...

Woo! You have a nice poem! One thing that I might suggest, if you're looking to improve this poem still, is that you should switch the first stanza (you are ...

Woo! I get to read an edited story! This is awesome. :) I guess this means that I should talk about the story, eh? ;) First of all! I think ...

Hey Cassie! I promised you a critique and, well, here I am! :D First of all! Very exciting stuff going on here! You have mad people attacking these characters... maybe ...