Snoink

Hi Thomas! So, I don't think the rambling is really problematic here. I like rambling stories. In fact, some of those rambling stories are some of the most awesome stories ...

Ack! I love this poem! Some of the rhymes are awkward, lol, but I don't care. I thought I would hate this poem, since I actually did hear voices in ...

Hi ethe! :D Okay! About this poem? You mention that the spider is going to face death for the first time! Which is cool and whatever. But then, a couple ...

Eh... I wouldn't submit it. For one, the formatting would look odd in the journal. For another, you talk about what you know about yourself, but then you say you ...

Okay, so this is what you were talking about! Anyway, just one really short note... I thought it was weird that you capitalized TV but not I. The i is ...

Hey Persephoneia! Powerful stuff here! The most powerful part was about the beggar and such. That presented a strong image that really captured the essence of your anger and showed ...

Only four hours in a car? :P Lucky! Anyway, yay! Thank you so much Cal! This is an awesome gift. :)

Hi Mauer! :D It looks like you're struggling with writing a literary essay! It's very hard, isn't it? Plus, a lot of English teachers aren't very good at explaining what ...

Nitpick! down to every last experiance.

I agree wih leebass. I have no idea what these character-things are. What have ears and act like insects or bacteria? It's weird. I can't think of anything to fit ...

women seized to exist It should be "ceased." As far as the work goes, I think it would be better if you made it a bit more over the top. ...

Shakespeare said that brevity is the soul of wit, and I am inclined to agree with him. You keep on repeating yourself so that this poem seems more like a ...

Hi DeadenedPulse! :D Your poem had excellent ideas! I love the fact that the Son and God and the demons are walking together! It's quite a strange idea. However... maybe ...

Yep! Definitely song material. I would love to see this in some sort of thing in a history class so we can get the history of the wives straight... I ...

Hmm... for some reason, I really didn't find this funny! I think it hits a bit too close to home and stuff. ;) Still! It starts off as a potentially ...