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Yay for Juliann coming to stay! :D As far as your poem goes? I think it would be super neat if you could talk about her kicking butt. Right now, ...

Ack! Tangent (and yes, it's really you!) these are soooooo good. I love them. I love how they build off each other, I love how they are haikus but so ...

Hi Matthews! :D First of all, your title seems to have an identity crisis! Is it Soiled Vows or Broken Vows? Now, for the rest of the poem! It seems ...

Yay! It's a little too blunt! I would probably trim it just a bit. Something like... her spine bloomed from her curved back like a mountain, of Emaciation Co. with ...

Oooh! Yummy! A poem! :D First, a typo! Too something about money and greed, how very apt

Ahhh! You know the way to my heart... multi-variable ecomonics calculus class? THAT IS SO COOL. Anyway! Keep you as constant;

Hi Kiicoh! :D Okay! So this critique is going to sound extremely nitpicky, but that's only because I really like the concept of your poem. :) Now! The first thing ...

Hey fruity! :D Eek! A cutting poem. That makes me sad. :( Hopefully, you're less pissed off now! As far as the poem goes! I like using pain in poems, ...

Hi Warrior Princess! :D Okay, so when I saw the title, I kind of squeed because it reminds me of Stravinsky's "Rite of Spring" and I rather adore that whole ...

I'm glad you're not depressed! :o As far as the poem goes, I think it holds a lot of potential! I mean, your character essentially watching someone die from cancer. ...

Hi Monument! I think this poem might have tried too hard as far as bombarding us with images. It looks more like a checklist than a poem because it lists ...

Ooooooooh... a work by BlueAfrica? I want! So, this one was almost realistic except for the fact that it was not nearly long enough. I don't know... little girls don't ...

Hahaha, I think you should stop talking with serious poetry if this is the sort of stuff that you come up with instead. It's quite delightful! It reminds me of ...

Hi Kafka! :D I like the second story better! It has more of an ironic feeling to it, which I kind of adore. The only thing that could possibly make ...

Hey Drecka! :D First of all, you'll want to run a spell check on this! There's a couple of errors in here. ;) Now, for the actual story commentary! :D ...