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Hey Sanareth! :D Well, this is a morbid poem! I'm guessing the he in the poem is dead now... and I am guessing the narrator is a she, so those ...

Hello ozasatya, and welcome to YWS! :D Debate competitions can be rough... it's true! Part of me likes the first part of the poem, because it's obviously after a crummy ...

Pudding! Soooooo many spelling mistakes! It's quite ridiculous... but incredibly fixable! Run it through a spell checker and fix them all! :D Anyway, fantastic dream! Really! The main thing that ...

Okay! So I don't get this. She is underage, cutting herself, turning to drugs. The child, for some reason, isn't a miscarriage. And, at the hospital... they allow her to ...

Hi Tiger! So, I could definitely tell that the writing style was new to you! But at the same, I didn't quite like the style or the content of the ...

Clever! I quite liked this. :) A star for you! The main problem is that the words don't run together smoothly. It's a little hard to describe, so just read ...

Hey wati! I know that you said not to shatter this, so I'm not going point by point on this, but I would like to point out some things that ...

Hey Ego! I've seen you critiquing on YWS, so I figured I would drop by! :D I didn't like the first two stanzas at all. They were really boring. It's ...

I could hardly breathe because he was chocking me with my own clothes.

Hehe! What a twisted story! I like it. What is this a fanfiction of? :) Anyway, I have one grammatical comment, but it should be easy, so no worries! Whenever ...

Hey emoticon! Welcome to YWS! :D There is a difference between poetry and brain dumps! Brain dumps belong to journals or blogs... places that are personal and not up for ...

Okay, so this is the nit-picky review! The better review, full of lovely commentary on the actual story, is on TWS (since we need to get that place up and ...

Hey Words! Okay, this is going to be a really general review, so yay? For the first two stanzas, you have a really hopeful tone that makes it sound like ...

Eek! I really liked this for the most part. It reminded me of William Carlos Williams's "Red Wheelbarrow", which is always a good thing! My main problem was it wasn't ...

Hey Sachi! So yeah... you have a nice, clean style which is always a pleasure to read! However, a couple of rather major things irked me about this piece, so ...