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Hello SJ.. A review you request and a review you shall receive. The first flaw I immediately caught onto was the rhyme scheme with which you wrote this in. Judging ...

Mackenzie, hi. :] Simple poem you have here. The rhyme scheme seemed a little too cut-and-dry for my taste, but I think that all basically lies in the want to ...

Jemjive, hi. :mrgreen: Just here to lend a quick little review for you! Allow me to jump right into things. Now, to be simple, it seems as if you started ...

Xyra. :] Took me a moment, but I've arrived! Now, things I really liked. You dress up this scene so beautifully. I was intrigued by the atmosphere and the storybook/fairytale ...

Kafka. :mrgreen: Just stopping by to lend a thought or two. Nice work as usual, but I do think there's room for a few comments here and there. Allow me ...

Hey there, Boo. :] Well, I suppose for the most part I only have a few basic critiqueful things to toss at you, so here we go! I want to ...

Creativemuse! :] This was a fabulous attempt at a horror story if I do say so. All of the horror that I've ever attempted just doesn't evoke the right kind ...

Reise! :mrgreen: Now, I see this is a first chapter of sorts; a bit rough in the sense that you've done a decent job in describing some of what your ...

Hi there, Soos! :] I had a couple things I wanted to bring up about this piece that were somewhat off-putting to the traditional style of a short story . ...

Hi, Mimimac! :] Dropping by to see if I can't help you out a bit with this piece. Firstly, things that I liked! Overall, there's something very enticing about the ...

Hi, Michael! Well, I'll say I was a bit apprehensive of where this was going when I first started reading. You set up quite the interesting scene, and perhaps that's ...

UpandOut! Hi. :mrgreen: There were a few things I wanted to stop to critique you about that, if edited, I think could most certainly benefit this piece of yours! In ...

Hey there, Roxy. :mrgreen: I figured I'd stop by and lend a hand with a review! So here we go. The set-up of this was a bit familiar looking. Almost ...

Audy. :smt044 You're most certainly not a bother, and I am more than glad to take a look at this as I was just searching for something to review! Well, ...

Ahmad. :D Here as requested! Allow me to jump right into things. Now, as for the concept, I like to think of it as something worth the effort and imagination, ...