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Hi. :} so i will be giving you a few tips on your writing. I see where you are trying to go with the prologue but of course we all ...

ok :) well here we go! First things first, i think it was good in a sense it gave information about it just so the reader knows where to start. ...

Hi, Kuzco22 :D I will be critiquing your paper today. For starts in the beginning im going to point this out. Cherise replied as she stepped out the door. “Bye ...

I'm smiley, i'll be critiquing your paper. Well first things first, it was too short for me. You need to get more in depth about this if your planning on ...

Hi Crescent, I will be critiquing your paper. First things first way too fast. You need to explain more of the history behind this. You wouldnt just throw you arms ...

Very...Very graphical. Description was good. Well written short story. I do agree with what dreamy and Crescent said about the reality of how the students acted. Was not that creative ...

Hi, I will be critiqueing your paper today :D, Well i think your idea for this story is good and intresting. The story did get confusing at the end. I ...

That was a LOT like twilight in the beginning of the story. I do agree with Crescent it does seem that it was a person like Jacob. Other than that ...

You have a basic idea that a lot of people share or write. I thought its a good start but i would talk more about the characters and there personalitys. ...

Alright Crescent, I'm going to correct your work today on a couple of things that i think were either not worded properly or basically your people and plot. Well when ...

Cute idea about the cats but if you changed the beginning or idea in the beginning i should say would really get the reader intrested, instread of having her seem ...