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Re: Your Lingering Warmth Chapter 1
Awh, I could clearly picture little Sophia, even though you only gave us little details about her. When I first started reading I was sure that this was going to ...
Nov 8, 2011 - Re: Heroes and Demons (Chapter 1) Nov 7, 2011
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Re: The Frog Prince
Awh, this is cute. Although, as I kept reading I was getting a little confused. I think it was only one thing though. This: My toy was heavier than he ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: A Letter
Wow, lately I've been reading a lot of poems. I guess I just can't get enough. Your poem is so sweet and made me want to cry. C’: Sometimes when ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: (untitled for now. eep!)
C: I didn't really get the poem until after I read the spoiler, and when I did it made much more sense.
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: Journal Entry Four : Aulani:
I. Hate. You. :P Haha, juuust kidding. I love you and your story, but I hate that things have to be paused. In this post I hardly found any grammar ...
Oct 12, 2011 -
Re: Journal Entry Three : Aulani :
FOUND IT :P Really good, Aulani's encounter with Jeremy is really cute and I actually got mad when the moment was ruined by a dream - . - Anyway, some ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: My Best Friend
Awh, I am so glad that this ended happily. While I was reading I kept thinking, don't let it be all happy and sweet to just turn around make me ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Another Time
I had goose bumps and cold chills running all down my arms and legs. Lol, you're good. This is an amazing piece of poetry. I'm not a big fan of ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Not yet titled
She looked down at her new daughter, and, flinching back in alarm, she nearly dropped her child. I think the correct way of writing this would be: She looked down ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Illiterate.
Grammar-wise, everything looks correct.
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: Journal Entry One: Aulani:
:)I found the first entry (yay) and it sounds just as good as the first. I spotted nothing incorrect, grammar-wise, unless I missed it from being caught up in the ...
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: Journal Entry Two : Aulani :
:D I'm really looking forward to what comes next! It sounds amazing so far! A couple comments I have are that you need to space out the dialog instead having ...
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: Answer me.
It is a little confusing, but a girl from school comes to mind when reading this. A popular girl who thinks she's got it all together but the little whispers ...
Oct 9, 2011 -
Re: A Soul Named Lily (2 - Riley)
:)This story made me smile. Except I only read half way through it before I began skimming. Although it sounds like a really interesting read there wasn't really a hook ...
Oct 9, 2011