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Re: Days of Gold Gone By: Ep.Three
HI YOU. Slushy's here for a review. Haha. That rhymed. Anyway... I'm not going to touch technical stuff. XD Hmmm. I lied. There is still nothing else on it save ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Lightness
First of all: ilu
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: SlushySlapped
This was horrible. JUST AWFUL. Just kidding. :D I'm gonna not be biased either... even though you wrote just for me and I love it. "I want to be with ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: To Fall or Rise: Chapter 4
I'm back again! Are you getting tired of me yet? ;) I'm just going to jump right in! The work was hard, especially since she hadn't lifted a finger for ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: To Fall or Rise: Chapter 3
Hi again! I feel like my opening is getting old. Haha. It looks like EloquentDragon really covered all of the technical stuff so I'm not going to comment on that. ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Ch. 2 To Rise or Fall
Hi! I'm back for another review! I'm just going to comment as I read. "Her heart was pulsing in her throat by the time when one appeared in front of ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: To Fall or Rise: Chapter 1
Hi there! SlushySlapped here for a quick review! I was going to just read your third chapter and review based off that because it was in the green room, to ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: "Reunited"
Hi there! SlushySlapped here for a review! I see DreamWork got that first sentence. Definitely need a comma there! "I looked towards Crucifere and she was frozen still, she had ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Everyday Duels
Hi! SlushySlapped here for a review! I'm going to be honest, I don't know much about WarCraft. Actually I don't know anything about it. But I am going to review ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: How We Were
Hi! SlushySlapped here for a quick review! There wasn't anything I found to correct! I'm pretty sure this will be my shortest review ever. I really loved this! I am ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Trip
Hi there! SlushySlapped here for a review! I'm just gonna review as I go. Suggestions in red! "Grant was the bubbly music enthusiast who ran the place . Although he ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Part One of Chapter One of Friends
Hi CrystalPony21! SlushySlapped here for a review! Alright so first thing I noticed before reading is that this is one huge paragraph. That makes it difficult to read. I suggest ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Highway Part 1
Hi! SlushySlapped here for a review! First of all, welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here! Second, I'm going to be honest, I did not read the whole ...
Oct 4, 2013 -
Re: A Mothers Choice
Hi person I don't know. I have a strong feeling your name is Adam. So that's what I'm going to call you. And also, I'm going to review your work. ...
Oct 3, 2013 -
Re: ​Chapter one
Hey there! Slushy here with another review! Looks like a lot of people already pointed out grammar and such. But I found a couple more things. First thing I noticed ...
Sep 29, 2013
