Sinnful

throwing fist-fulls of ‘throwing fistfuls of’ of red tissue ‘of the red tissue’? to see me looking like a psycho attacking a box. I think this would be better as, ...

The flower was drenched in teardrops. I – loved – this. It’s a truly amazing opening line; fabulous imagery, and immediately snared my attention. Brilliant. a duty, almost, to I’d ...

Living on the outer suburbs, the bus was the only way to work. I think this would be better as, ‘ As I lived on the outer suburbs (of inserttownhere?), ...

Hello! I will be reviewing this piece for you tonight. c: scratching her skin I don’t think that ‘scratching’ is quite strong enough to convey what’s happening here. Maybe try ...

The way that their hair shines even in the winter or that famous contagious smile that never fails to fill your stomach with butterflies. ‘The way that their hair shines ...

Stay quiet. Words get you in trouble. I think this would be better as, ‘Stay quiet : words get you in to trouble.’ lawns: woven into I think this would ...

The thin, blonde-haired, blue-eyed girl about the age of fourteen with the large basket that seemed to be full of old rags stood on the edge of the street. Ooh. ...

She tumbled to the ground like a star dropping from the sky and connected with the earth in a crumpled tangle of milky white flesh and cobalt silk. First off, ...

Hello there, I’ll be reviewing your story today. c: Seven’s shouldn’t be the ‘ Sevens shouldn’t be the’ like 11 or 343, it’s also fine. ‘like eleven or three hundred ...

Hey there. This is my first critique on this site - and I'll try not to repeat things that the other reviewers have said. My skin is dry. I feel ...