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you are so SO good. that is all.

good wow?

Oh, wow, Gadi! Thank you very much for your critique. I have already put some time into cleaning up the minor parts you pointed out ("urban community," "four AM," etc), ...

Amelia , kudos to you for reviewing not one, but BOTH of my trashy pieces, especially because we have entirely different styles (or so it seems). Thank you for making ...

Alleycat, thank you for your time. I appreciate your thoughts. If you can think of any more feedback as to why the end wasn't effective, please let me know. That ...

Snoink, Ahg. There is a very likely chance that you're right about that last section ... I can't make up my mind. Either way, it's been submitted. We'll see what ...

Thank you, Dreamy. Your reply was very encouraging. I have plans to submit it to my University's literary magazine. I have encouraged another college-age member YWS to do so as ...

And Suzanne, I just did some investigation and she killed herself the same year the book was published, 1963. The book was published in January of 1963 and she was ...

first reaction: ew. second reaction: "tossing aside my white dress as you come down as golden rain" SWEET LINES! third reaction: wait a second ... ew. donne is fascinating, though. ...

i would suggest moving the "and" from the end of line one to the end of line two. "Her lips parted in Menelaus' ear and she whispered: "We'll always have ...

not a problem. glad i could help. On the statement of this poem: I recongize the humanity in the bible, and my lean was more so not to her story, ...

Hm, I have some critiques, but I will save those for a time other than 12:03 AM (Eastern Standard Time, of course.) Just using this post as a placeholder to ...

Liz -- Thanks. I agree, it does feel a bit disjointed. I don't know, I'm not a pro at these things -- I am trying my best. It is fine ...

I would like to nominate Speak by Laurie Halse Anderson. Yeah, I'm aware that the book has been branded with the YA label -- something many of us "literaries" look ...

I would like to nominate Speak by Laurie Halse Anderson. Yeah, I'm aware that the book has been branded with the YA label -- something many of us "literaries" look ...