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Oh, I'm sorry, I thought I did rate it..... Is 16+ wrong?

Thanks. Honestly the tense changes are just something I suck at. I change things when I edit and forget to change all of it to fit the latest decision. Chaos. ...

thanks. my egos growing right now.... okay i've popped it. yeah, i thought about what you said in the last part, and it does seem a little out of place. ...

Thanks, I've tried adding more description, and I've messed with a few scenes, so there's probably new mistakes, but oh well. I like this version better.

GAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ANGRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! FOR THE LAST TIME ALREADY, (takes deep breath) THIS IS A LITTLE STORY. AS IN NO CHAPTERS. AS IN NO NEED FOR PLOT. NO. NEED. FOR. PLOT

Ah, I might post the big story here, but mostly I figure I'll write little stories about it, posting them here, before incorporating them in my big story and sending ...

haha. inadvertant canada humor. oops. um... for the "not mourning either of them" i meant for it to be kind of a question answered in a later story, but the ...

thanks for the heads up, if you were curious about the prophecy bit, then I have a piece in production now that will explore that topic.

nah, im not annoyed, but its weird when i write something hoping to get a few effects and suddenly acquire several more. kind of confusing, but thanks for pointing those ...

ah, thanks for the advice, i didn't even realize that i was ixing tenses... oh well, i haven't written in a whle, I'll blame it on my skill getting rusty. ...

the animal thing was supposed to be refering to the father, but obviously that wasn't apparent. The idea was that when he made Temari's mother pregnant, he tainted her families ...

Ah! hey! you reviewed! Yay! yes, the "easy" is a character tick, but the mother is such a minor character that I wonder why I even bother. I'd change it, ...

i don't understand why you put the "listen to the voices in your head" part. I think you should either expand or explain that. I liked the poem though, it ...

Thanks, I've tried to do some edits to fix those. Actually, in my first draft of this, i was overusing that word a lot more, but then i realized that ...