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Re: Sense
Beautiful poem :) Now I know nothing about writing or anything so don't take anything I say too critically or personal. I think maybe the addition of a few commas ...
Jan 25, 2012 -
Re: Stars of Love
Again, this is very good writing. Just a few mistakes to work on. “How are you? Dear one , Have you been alright?” Put a comma in here. Same in ...
Jan 25, 2012 -
Re: Red rose
Hi there :) Firstly, I just want to say that your poem is very good, perhaps in the weong category though, I would have put this in the descriptive category ...
Jan 25, 2012 -
Re: Truth
This isn't bad, I like your style, reminds me of my own. One thing I will say I noticed and I think would make all the difference is if you ...
Jan 25, 2012 -
Re: .
I think this is a really good piece of work for a fourteen year old! Fair play. Gloomy feeling throughout reading, I get a sense of uncertainty.. but I enjoyed ...
Jul 21, 2011
