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Re: Perspective
Hey Jade! Shady here with a review for your poem this fine evening! :D So, I like the idea behind the first stanza, but it feels too choppy. Maybe combine ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: A hundred, a hundred and ten, a hundred and one.
Hey Matti! Shady here with a short review for you this fine evening! :D Overall, I liked this poem quite a bit. It was intriguing, and obviously filled with emotion. ...
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Re: In-character musings
Hey Symph! Shady here with a review for you this fine evening! :D I must admit, your first lines intrigued me, and have me excited to read on. Not many ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Destiny of the Damned
Hey Andra! Shady here with a review for you this fine evening! :D Rather an a line-by-line critique, I'll just leave you general suggestions. -1- When writing dialogue, each new ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: A Knight of Courage
Hey Ooka! Shady here with a review for you this fine afternoon! :D As Rosan mentioned, this story starts out very similar to "Mulan" with a girl stealing her father's ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Happy Birthday
Hey bisc! Shady here with a short review for you this fine afternoon! :D I don't fully understand this piece. I get it's an emo/cutting story with a lot of ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Bronze Box (chapter 1)
Hey Psudi! Shady here with a review for you this fine afternoon. :D it was the harvest season, just after spring, ~ Nope. Harvest season is not just after spring. ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Year of the Scorpio - Chapter 2
Hey Noelle! Shady here with a review for you this fine afternoon. I haven't read the first chapter of your book, so forgive any ignorance in this review. Alright! :D ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: nothing friendly, nothing pleasant
Hey Janika! Shady here with a review for you this fine morning, as promised. ;) I've made no secret of the fact that I'm not good at poetry, but I'm ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Lasting Wish
Hey Gans! Shady here with a review for you this fine afternoon. :) Firstly, I see you are new, so welcome to YWS! If you need any help, I'm always ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Thoughts of a Used Juice Box
Hey Egs! Shady here with the attempted review I promised you. :D As I told you before, this poem made me cry my first time reading it. I wasn't kidding. ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Assassin
Hey Malla! Shady here with a short review for your short poem! :D I must say, I enjoyed this quite a bit. It brought a smile to my face. The ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Reverends
Hey Elgai! Shady here with a review for you this fine evening! :D Screams of grief and terror pervaded the halls. The ululations tore through my soul ~ Ooh, a ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: (tentative) The Big Three - chapter 1: Neith Leaves The Order
Hey, it's my almost-mentee. ;) Just kidding. But I'm still interested in reading your work, so here I am with a review. Though, as predicted, mine will probably be less-harsh ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Devil's Trap
Hey Ainh! Shady here with a review for you this fine evening! :D I must say, I enjoyed this piece quite a bit. And by that, I mean it's one ...
Mar 31, 2013