Shadowsun

Part 2 of Chapter 3 “This is true, but you have lived through more than one human life time.” Zanderick looked grimly at Braynon. “That is a story for another ...

Very nice. Lots of description. I like it. Want to read more. 10 out of 10 so far.

Part 1 of Chapter 3. "Seer, what are you doing in our domain?" Inquired the Elf. "Travelling." "This is apparent. Why?" "To retrieve an item that is lost." "If you ...

Chapter 2 Rian rode proudly, his new sword sheathed in its scabbard, hanging from his belt. They had quickly escaped the market town after getting his sword. His horse galloping ...

Chaged punctuation Prologue Zanderick broke out of the trance his eyes fading from the deep golden colour that had seeped into them when he fell into the dreamstate. He gasped. ...

Thank you I'm English This better?? Zanderick broke out of the trance his eyes fading from the deep golden colour that had seeped into them when he fell into the ...

Some changes have been added to this. Prologue On T'au in the midst of the great desert a sheet of sand quivers and shakes, the sand then begins to move ...

...... WOW..... I can't think of anything else to say

Yeah coursework isn't the first thing you want to do with your time. I should have critiqued other peoples work first but I posted this before I read the PM ...

Great storyline, looking forward to reading more *scribbles out* makes you want to read more :D

"Shas'la, advance!", the fire warriors started to advance towards the swarm. "Halt!" The Shas'la stopped. "Present!" They took up firing positions. "Take aim!" they each selected a traget amongst the ...

"Kaj'inal, Kaj'inal!" Dak'e'shi roared over the comms system "fall back, you are no longer needed there". But nothing could penetrate the red haxe that surrounded Kaj'inal, the black and yellow ...

I thought that was well written. But you did you write it? yes I did Lets try again then.... All of my story so far together: On T'au in the ...

All of my story so far together: It is the 41st Millennium and the Imperium of Man is under constant attack. The God Emperor of Mankind sits on his Golden ...

First things first... thank you for all your comments to explain everything T'au is the homeplanet of the Tau, it is the origional Sept(colony/planet) and if you want to know ...