Shadowstalker

Very nice, very very nice. I like it. Those that say too much detail? Pshaw, no matter. After all, some people like Lord of the Rings ....I think personally that ...

Okay. It was....alright. Could be improved though. Spelling errors for one, and paragraphs are a good thing, trust me on this. ^_^ Oh, and double space your para's like I ...

Ooooh boy. Where to start? Grammar is a -must- dear. It would help alot, otherwise readers just ....jerk from one line to the next, or each verse runs into the ...

Umm....You know, only one thing sort of majorly stood out for me. And that's how each new line started with a capital. Like, is sort of like you're writing a ...