ShadedLight

This a piece, as I've said before, that makes you think. You do a good job at 'showing not telling' which is one of the things that makes it so ...

I believe the term I'm looking for is EPIC. You really drew me into this story. I couldn't have stopped reading if I had tried. The only things I could ...

Oh goody, a super-hero story! I really love those! But enough about my geeky pleasures, this is a review. This is a really good start, and if you continue this ...

You did a really good job cramming a lot of story into a small word count, but I feel that in this instance it may have worked to your disadvantage. ...

I think this scene would be better if it was something other than just dialogue. Right now, we don't even know who the people who are talking are. Also, I ...

Wowza. Your writing is very powerful. The only errors I could see were using accept instead of except. Also, you wrote, "I couldn’t remember the reason I had come out ...