SeraphTree

Thanks for your advice, and welcome!!! :smt040

You need to put a space between your paragraphs :)+:)=:D

WHOA!!!! You really need to break this into smaller paragraphs. At the moment it looks very HUGE. :D

Yes, please POST!!!!! I want to know what happens.... The thrill, the excitement, it's just one post away.... :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D If there is anything I have said to offend you, please ...

:smt045 I don't know how to invite though. I think you go to the profile or something :smt017 Anyway, YES I will be your friend!! :D:D:D:D:D:D :smt035

YES!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE read Songwood Part II. *not saying that the crits I received are bad* More is better!!!! Also Jerrsea'ya in Action Fic. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D *bows, adores Monki* You know, I ...

GOOD!!!!!!!!!! Wow you are cheerful. I think it's rubbing off on me :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Yeah, you can invite him. :D:D:D:D:D I don't see why there would be a problem. :D:D:D:D:D

Well, if someone steals your work, it will be obvious. And since it will be obvious, people won't read their work, or they'll say "uh, this is too much like ...

Alright, I'll se what I can do. At the moment, I can't really crit X(

THANK YOU. I really didn't realize that part was so confusing. -.-* I'll rewrite the fight scene, make things more clear :D... Oh, and some things will be explained later. ...

As Jabber said, we don't know very much about Dora's friend. To me, she sounds like a really bad friend. I mean, this guy is about to rape Dora, and ...

Hmmm..... I'll see if I can make that part any clearer... :)

heres the link

I'll crit when I come back :D:D:D:D