SemperAugustus

Hi, I thought this is an interesting first chapter. A few personal remarks: I think you could have made the chasing scene more more suspenseful, make it seem like there ...

Hi, Thanks for the review. If you like this chapter, feel free to take a look at my other chapters as well. This scene references a lot from chapter one ...

Hi, Thanks for another review. Some of the things from this chapter reference chapter one which is why a few things can be vague. I look to minimize the short ...

Hi, Thank you for your review and your suggestions. This is the second chapter that Naga appears in. If you're interested, see chapter 4 when she's introduced. I'm also always ...

Hi Sarah, I have posted other chapters. It'd be great to get your opinion on them.

Hi, I'm so glad you like the prologue but more importantly the last sentence. It took me quite some time to tweak it so I felt it fit just right. ...

No problem. If you could review my prologue, that'd be great!

Thanks, I'm glad you like it.

Hi, thanks for the review. That's the first time i mentioned it. My thoughts were the same when I was writing. When Naga subdues the first guards, there is no ...

Thanks for pointing that out. Those are exactly the kind of inconsistencies that I miss when I proofread. Will definitely change that. Glad you enjoyed it.

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Hi, The start really caught my attention but I found it difficult to get through for a couple of reasons. The descriptions at the start was really long and there ...

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Hi, The start really caught my attention but I found it difficult to get through for a couple of reasons. The descriptions at the start was really long and there ...

Thanks for the feedback.

Thanks for the review. It took me a while to structure it this way. Update will follow soon.