Satira

Hi! I always suck at thesis sentences, etc, so i'm just going to dive right in, k? k. You (the narrator) describes people walking down the street, children playing, but ...

k I don't know that the rodent is (squirrel?) but your rhythm is pretty much perfect towards the beginning. Then it gets a little frayed. So it's great until you ...

hi! I just have nitpicks here, so bear with me. "the old silver van" could be changed to OUR old silver van. I know that sounds stupid, but it makes ...

this made me happy. very happy. I know it may have been a very conscious choice on your part, but by not using capitalization, the rant loses power, so I ...

Hi! ok, what i'm going to say is that you need to treat your own story like it's a published novel that you are reading out loud to an audience. ...

Hi! you keep calling insecurity 'dear', like it's in any way close to you, and it isn't. In any way. Insecurity has no benefits, and I can't see any reason ...

Hi! the first thing that I struck me about this is that the characters sort of speak as if they're reciting from an essay: it is very measured and logical. ...

Hello! this is a very blocky paragraph and it intimidates me. this is not a criticism on your writing, but it would be great if you could press the 'enter' ...

Hello! I like stories about sociopaths. They always fascinate me. Mister Smith, while an un-empathetic criminal, kind of lacks the characteristics of a sociopath (besides lack of empathy). See, even ...

hello! I am Satira (a squire to the Knights of the Green Room.) I will review, and review I shall. Sorry it took so long...I know how it feels to ...

Ok, is this the Hobbit? it sounds like the Hobbit. it sounded overwhelmingly like the Hobbit. but that is okay. It sounds exactly like the Hobbit, and the Hobbit is ...

hello! I'm not very religious, though I do go to my local episcopal church on the whim of my mother. I have some understanding of the concept of God(it may ...

Hi! I used to love warriors, but i've gotten a bit out of touch with it over the years. I was super into it a long time ago... Your writing ...

I do like that you brought this up. That question of how important romantic love between people really is. I think your thoughts are all over the place here and ...

Hello! So I was browsing through the green room, and the title of this caught my eye, so here I am. let's begin..... To start things off, there are way ...