Sassafras

Okay, since this is fairly long, I will be reviewing in parts. The first part - this part - is the prologue that you posted. The seconds and third part ...

Howdy, Writer! I haven't been reviewing in a while and I'm determined to start up again. So, here goes! You walk away without knowing the pain you leave behind. You ...

Hello again, NYC! I'd recognize the car anywhere, as I'd heard and seen nothing of it when my best friend Jeff got it for his sixteenth birthday this year. This ...

Hello, Writing! This was very cute and also very short. This could be a very good story if you added more description, imagery, and plot. This needs a lot more ...

Hello, Ani! And welcome to Yws! Trust me, you will love it here. Okay, so first I will go one with my nitpicks before giving my suggestions and comments. Nitpickies: ...

Hello, Shep. I noticed that the people above me got everything I noticed wrong in this story as far as grammar mistakes go so, for the sake of not being ...

Hello again, Nightowl. Thanks for the PM. "Mason!" Georgia, my five year-old sister, (action here) latching on to my leg and looked up at me. I grinned, despite the fact ...

Hello, Anger. You were right, this does have a lot of reviews, but I will review anyway! Her lips were changing colour and her eyes were listless, her hands were ...

Muahaha! Hello, Ishh. Tonight was the night that every Fatua in the kingdom met, sang out for all of Lasverna to hear. That comma would be best replaced with the ...

Hello, Lena! “Fuckin’ A! What the fuck is wrong with you!” I understand you want to emphasize his screaming, but the proper puncuation mark behind the second sentence needs a ...

Hello, Emm. Emerge and fright. This really doesn't make much sense. They'll pick the life,right off your bone. Bone should be plural. Demons rise up,from the ground.The hell hounds make,unholy ...

Hello, Ced. I'm not going to go on with my usual nitpicks, as I could not find many. But, I really must say, there seem to be a lot of ...

Hello, Retro. "Alice. Alice put down the knife" I said , trying to calm my wife of seven years. Alice was about 5 five foot 7 seven and had long ...

Hello, Itisme! Me again. As usual, nit picks first. Even though ( close space ) , other than the acres upon acres that it sat on, there was nothing farm ...

*Appears in a cloud of smoke.* Hello, Honey. This memory though, was different. It doesn’t flash in my head as a memory, it’s is as if I was there. I ...