Sapphire

Hi, and welcome to YWS! Please don't think I'm being patronising, but I have to say that for being 13, you have some great insights into some complex issues. :) ...

Hey! I don't like to see work go without any comments, so here are my thoughts (whether you want them or not)! :lol: I'm not going to go into a ...

As everyone's already said, the idea behind the poem is its main strength. You already have a couple of critiques that look at the grammar and other details, so I'm ...

I had put off reviewing this poem because I wasn't going to be very helpful, but decided to let you know how much I liked it. Firstly, the title. When ...

She wasn't quiet , but l oud in a sort of helpless, effortless way. - I don’t think ‘helpless’ is the right word here. I understand that you mean she ...

Hey! I really liked these lyrics. However, I agree with all the suggestions chocoholic made, especially the last section. Although it could maybe work if it was sung underneath a ...

Hey! I really like the idea behind the poem because it’s relatable, but I do have some suggestions. I’ve quoted the whole poem, picking out any grammar points and such ...

First of all, let me say I liked this. Then let me apologise in advance, because I've changed it to try and give you ideas of how to make the ...

Hi! I know nothing about the band so I was going through this as if it were simply a story. I started off going through this line-by-line, but similar problems ...

To add to what clograbby picked out: “Alright.” I reach out and take the solitary object between my index and middle fingers. A flash of flame and the end burns ...

Sorry for all the quotations following, but it was unnecessary to quote the whole story and this was the easiest way of nit-picking! There’s the refrigerator, no food. Her canvases ...

I liked this! As everyone's already said, you've really managed to make it sound like a lullaby. There's a soothing lilt to it. I've quoted the poem so I can ...

I love this! The rhythm is spot-on and I'm a fan of rhyming so, structurally, it's perfect. Also, well done on the image! I'd never thought of dry lips like ...

I'm going to review in a quote so I can score words out and so on. I'm not going to comment on this in the review because it's just something ...

A new dawn is approaching, - Punctuation. Note below. its light shines through my fingers. - No apostrophe in 'its' when it doesn't mean 'it is'. But still, a sorrowful ...