Saphirra

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

I really love the way you completely twisted the story around, and used happy as the evil villain. The thing about the witch actually being nice is interesting as well. ...

cool, thanks. I'll try and space it out. :D

actually, the 'one dude' in the prologue is Juliana, who is a girl. thanks for bringing that up! i'll do my best with the other stuff! Saphirra

don't worry, the whole thing with the powers is made clearer later.

That was quick! Great! now, on with the review... “Okay.” Ryanne said. In addition, they started serving the American clubhouse. You mean, together, they started serving the American clubhouse * ...

This. Was. Hilarious! Great job, everyone needs a laugh once in a while. Continue with these funny writings!

thanks!