Saphirra

I really liked this. it was interesting and mysterious, and i waned to know more about what happened. A really good thing i noticed you did was make the boys ...

I really liked the way this kept me wanting to read more and see what happened. you captured the essence of how this woman (girl?) was conflicted, but you never ...

I think that this is cool, the way that you are proud and unashamed of how you feel. I'm not bi or anything, but i totally support you. i think ...

I agree with the others about the beginning. What bearing does the poem have on the actual story? Why is Bordwick reading it to his colleagues? What field does he ...

I like you're plot, but the speed at which things happens makes it harder to understand then if you just spaced it out. Also, i think you really need to ...

I give this a thumbs up. This draws the reader in from the very beginning, and i love the way you make the narrator seem to be afraid of the ...

This was an interesting piece. I found myself worried about Deborah, but i find the end unrealistic. she wouldn't be able to stay on the land that her family had ...

I liked the way you delivered the story in concise sentences. it made it stronger and more impressing. Its interesting and attention grabbing. However, i agree that you could work ...

Hey! I really liked that. An idea kind of popped up when i saw all the people talking about emotion though. If the killer is crazy, or has autism that ...