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I enjoy the plot but I agree with MiRaCLeS. Do a bit more showing instead of telling. And some more description would add layers to the story. I also feel ...

I love this story! :) There is nothing I dislike about and it was written very well. It was a really sweet story and sounds like something you could continue ...

That world is so messed up its awesome! :D I really like the plot so far and how you include aliens, witches, mythical creatures, and so much more. This is ...

I thought you did well but I do agree with wickedwonder in terms of more description and letting us know how your characters are feeling. An extra line between each ...

That was really nice... Although, I suggest you put a line in-between each paragraph (and for your first one too) and don't put your dialogue in italics. I think it ...

I agree with all the comments about it being rushed. I also think there were not enough descriptive words and such. Your main character was very much like a camera ...

I think you should put an extra line in-between each paragraph though; it is hard to tell when a paragraph begins and where it ends. Some of your sentences were ...

That was really good. I liked it a lot. Emera reminded me of a certain someone and her brother reminded me of another certain someone (Ranger51 is going to be ...

That is amazing...! You wrote that? Wow... And you're only 13. I can't wait to read some of your other works. :) I love how you incorporated French in your ...

That was really good... It very nearly made me cry. And sadly, that was probably because I realized that I think more like the poem going top to bottom... I ...

Wow! I really liked your story. It was cool how you showed he was a normal guy living a normal life like anybody else but how you made him feel ...

Hello! I really liked your story. :) There were only a few errors with quotation marks, comas, and period placement. I thought it was cool how you switched from Felicity ...

I loved it!!! That was amazing. It brought tears to my eyes and made my heart beat a million miles a minute. Your poem left a beautiful message. When it ...