Ryukun7

Thanks for the helpful comments! I definitely think the suggestions will better my story. :)

Thanks for the critique. I don't usually write poetry, and I'm not very good at it. :lol: For some reason, although I used dashes in Microsoft Word, they always appear ...

Thanks for your opinion! :) I'll be posting more of the story soon.

This poem really cuts deep. I can feel your emotions through your words. I think it's one of your best poems, and that you really put your heart into this. ...

I appreciate the critique. I definitely should have proofread this piece before posting it. This is actually an older piece of work. I agree that the second part is compressed. ...

Thanks for the critique and advice! That was very helpful. Maybe I'll rewrite the beginning one day.