Rydia

I think I like the scene because it adds some background history and gives a reason for Nora not seeming too social at this point. One suggestion though - And ...

I didn't mean to upset you Clau but I'm so glad you actually liked it. I was rather worried about this one which is why I've sort of held it ...

Thanks so much Claudette! I've fixed the typos and I'm looking into doing a re-write without the 'story within the story' technique. I'm not even sure why I wrote it ...

Thanks for pointing that out Reyu and thanks for reading =)

This was sweet. It certainly gives some good background on Gladman and it's nice to know that TEMPO is going to fight on the right side. Good work as always ...

Lol. Perhaps I shall :wink:

No problem and pm me if there's ever anything else you'd like me to read.

On the technical point, you're completely correct so my thanks for bringing that to my attention and as to if he's blind, I don't think he is but it's an ...

Thanks for the critique sokool and I'm glad you liked it. Ben Nevis is basically a mountain. Well, the biggest mountain in the UK to be exact and a bit ...

Thanks so much for the comments everyone =)

I want a ticket! Give me one! I loved the action in this scene and there's so much conflict. Well done. Your characters are well defined and I can't wait ...

Pure brilliance! I love it Snoink, it's hilarious. I think my favourite part is when the man with no name comes on. Poor guy. I can totally understand how he ...

Oh wow. You two, this is awesome! I love all the action and conflict that you have in your posts and they fit together so well. You both have brilliant ...

Ooooh. I like the 'back story' on the orbs and it's certainly more effective than having someone explain it through pure speech. I simply can't wait to see this done ...

Thanks for the suggestions you two and yes, it shall have to be removed. We just got our agent =)