Rydia

Hi, hi! Okay so I'm not sure what the part at the beginning is? Only it's too short to be a prequel so maybe you meant fot it to be ...

Sounds like a really good read, sort of another take on the whole virus invasion thing but with aliens and stuff thrown in? I might have to check it out. ...

Hi hi! The wind blew past Elena’s hair, the soft cool wind. [The repetition is good here but you should follow it up. If you're going to draw so much ...

Hi there! Let's see what you have here, I think I will start with a few line-by-line comments... Title: Okay so the alliteration is cool but other than that, your ...

Oh! This is an interesting idea for a contenst, very creative! Let's see then, I shall review your title choices based on how well they flow, how well they fit ...

Hi again, buddy! Okay, before I start I should say that this wasn't to my liking. The review to follow will be critical and less about how you could improve ...

Hello! Let's see what you have here... oooh. Interesting. So you're a bit repetetive and could use some more imagery, some more atmosphere. But I love where you start from ...

Hi there! Okay so first, your title. It's a little over-wordy for my liking. I think you could make it more snappy like 'Mirror Girl' or 'Look in the Mirror' ...

Just a few comments first: The sun sank further and further down in the Eastern sky. As it lowered itself away from visibility, the airs temperature [This is phrased awkwardly ...

Hai hai! So I thought I'd drop by and take a look at some more of your writing :) I like this piece! There's a few things I'm not sure ...

Hai! Okay so another good addition to the collection but I think you need to concentrate just a little more on showing the real love element of the piece. You ...

Hai Mark! Okay so I thought I'd post my comments here so that I can refer to the story and stuff. The first thing I noticed is that somtimes your ...

Hiya! So I really enjoyed reading this and there's a lot to like here, but the atmosphere wasn't quite right. It started off really well but when you got to ...

Its been so long that you've probably forgotten I was even reviewing your work. But! I have some spare time now so I'll get at least one done today and ...

Why hullo again! I've finally got a chance to take a look at your fourth chapter so let's get stuck in shall we? My first comment is I'd like to ...