Rydia

I'm not sure about this. I like the idea behind it but I found your narrator's voice too forceful and yet at the same time trying to express both the ...

Hi there! First, I have an issue with your author's note. It should not be up to the reader where the action takes place. That's important! Every aspect of the ...

Hey again :) I love the historical event you're working with here, the East-West Berlin divide is so little done and yet so interesting and very workable. I don't think ...

Hi buddy! So I like this, you've got some really cool ideas, a pretty interesting world and a lot of intrigue. However, you've also got a lot of paragraphs choc ...

Hey there! So this is really cute and I rather love the simplicity. I'm sure whoever you wrote it for would be delighted :) I do have a few criticisms ...

Hi there! Sorry this took me a couple of days to get to but here I am :) Right! First off, I like your title. It's simple but interesting and ...

Hello there! First, may I say that this is beautifully written considering that English isn't your first language. There's a few mistakes but nothing that makes the story unreadable. I ...

Hey there! First off, this is really sweet and I'm sure any girl would be delighted to receive it. Having someone write a poem for you or do anything artistic ...

Hey there! I haven't read any of the previous reviews but hopefully I'll not repeat too much and if I do, at least you know there's a consensus! Okay so ...

Hey hey! I think this piece has potential. You're dealing with an ambitious plot here and you've not done a bad job. There's a lot that needs fixing up and ...

Hi Victoria! If you want this moved to poetry at any point, just let me know and I can help with that :) It does sound a little like lyrics ...

Hey hey! Why thank you and don't worry, request as many reviews as you like, whenever you like! You've got a pretty solid title and a nice framework to this ...

Most poems written in ten minutes aren't going to be amazing but no worries, that's what re-drafting is for! Having said that, I think this isn't half bad. You could ...

Hey Ben! First off, good title, I love the oxymoron and it sets the scene very clearly - your reader isn't in any doubt as to the general theme of ...

Hey there! An interesting piece you have here, I love the title and the initial concept and I don't have many comments really. There's a few rough edges that can ...