Rydia

Why hello there! Alright so I like this and I think you've done a great job at showing rather than telling. The descriptions were nice, though they had a slight ...

Why hello there! This is a pretty good early attempt at poetry, though you've fallen into a few common pit falls. First, the grammar. Now some poems do capitalise every ...

Hello there, my dear. I like this. Not as much as some of your other poetry as it is perhaps lacking in the sophistication and vivid imagery, but it's great ...

Well howdy! First off, I like this. It was a little rough around the edges and could have done with a more concrete plot, but, there was a nice use ...

Why hello there! My apologies for the slight delay on this, I just got lured into the most epic BBQ but I digress, I digress. Let's see. I'm a little ...

Hi there, this is quite a good poem you've got here. I love the idea behind it and I think you've made a really good effort with the rhyme and ...

Why hello there! My apologies for the short delay on this, I've not had a lot of time recently. Alright, I'll give you some of my thoughts and suggestions as ...

Why hello there my dear! I must say I was very excited when you told me about the context of this piece and the idea to write it on Fire ...

Why hello there! I think you're writing on a very interesting topic here and there are parts of this I really love, but you get a bit rambly and a ...

Hello there! There's a lot I really liked about this like your use of the 'She' which added some mystery and a lot of nice emphasis and your easy, very ...

I thought I'd throw you a review oh enemy of mine ;) I like this. The lack of punctuation irks me somewhat but I'll leave that to you since it's ...

Why hello there! Alright I'm going to start by giving you some comments as I read through and then I'll round up with some more general advice and overall opinion: ...

Why hello there! Alright then so I liked this and it grew on me more the second and third times I read it, but I also found it a little ...

An excellent first attempt! You've got a great sense of rhyme, especially all those internal ones and there's some clever wording going on here. However, your flow is a little ...

Hello there! This is quite lengthy so I'm going to make a few comments as I read through but rather than concentrating on nit-picks, I'll give you some more general ...