Rosalie

Hey, Abigail! I thought that the idea behind this story was wonderful--I've been in that barber chair before. (Not the one with the cancer; just the friend.) It's a really ...

Hey, Blackbird! I'm going to be honest--I just read Spork's review, and I suppose I'm really dumb. I'm not exactly Captain Subtle, but I really didn't understand this piece. But ...

Hey, Maddy! You said you wanted nitpicking, but I'm not very good at that, so I'll do a little of this, a little of that. On the harsh, concrete floor ...

Hey, Zayrastriel! I agree with Spencer--tough topic, but you handled it artfully. I'm especially a fan of this paragraph: Children know everything. It’s a confusing sort of paradox – wisdom ...

Hey, Flit! Oh goodness. This story was adorable. I am a fan. I especially loved the milkman--sweet and simple. And, again, adorable. Another thing that I like about it is ...

Hey, JaneThermopolis! This is a really solid piece. I felt like the English class intro was a little too cutesy, but you worked around that effectively. Call me a first-semester ...

Hey, servant4christ! Blood dripped from my fingers and the stench of flesh filled the air. This is a really interesting first line. It got me hooked--however, in the following paragraph, ...

Hey, Lydia! I'm going to critique this as a childrens' poem. If this was not supposed to be a childrens' poem, honey, perhaps we need to talk. That fuzzy, wuzzy ...

It's gadigadigadigadigadi! (A cookie if you guess who this is.) That was good, for your age. ...just kidding. If not a bit strange for your age. I think that's the ...

Hey, 015042! What a great ending. I didn't even realize that you had no sensory description until I read that line--and then went back and read the whole thing again. ...

Hey, RosieBaker! This is short. Short's okay--a break for reviewers, I guess--but in general, try to keep your posts around 500 words or more. More words, more room for mistakes, ...

Hey, SnapesonaPlane! Your style is really solid and really beautiful--I love it, and I hope to read more of it. 1. Reasons The most important thing that was missing in ...

Hey, CorrineIone! This is really short (and I'm not sure what a teaser blurb is supposed to be), so I'll just hit the highlights of style/characterization that you can carry ...

Hey, inkwell! I love your voice in this story--it's kind of wry, kind of dry. Not a romance novel voice by any other name, so I'm excited to read it. ...

Hey Butterfinger! I have to admit--I really, really love cute high school romances. Perfect summer reading. I hope you continue with this! 1. CONVENTION I'm not sure where the old-school ...