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*copy/pastes* I completely agree with needing more emotion, it being basically an info dump taking away mystery, etc. I think what I'll end up doing either throughout the next chapters ...

I completely agree with needing more emotion, it being basically an info dump taking away mystery, etc. I think what I'll end up doing either throughout the next chapters or ...

Thanks for the review it was really helpful and made me think about what I need to write next. Ivy's age is around the same as everyone else's I'm assuming. ...

Thanks for the review! It was really helpful! I can def see some disconnects in what you pointed out. my intention for the lapping salt thing was twofold: I have ...

Very Sure ;)

well of course you'll need points! Writing a couple reviews everyday should take care of that. But I wasn't suggesting you post all of these chapters right now and spam ...

Heey just a suggestion: you'll probably want to break this into M U C H smaller parts. like maybe 53 of them? Otherwise I don't think anyone will want to ...

You sound a little confused at what the story was here. Although the water creature was an interesting and valid interpretation, I'm going to share my own to clarify a ...

I'm pretty sure it was a review day and that was probs your team :p

Wow, thank you for this excellent review! It was actually really, really helpful! I now see some things I need to change. Thank you thank you thank you!

Thanks for your review! The "you" is just the colloquial "you" that really means "I" (as in, "you know when -you- wake up and have that awful taste in your ...

oh my goodness why did this post four times? lol sorry %u2661

...what did and didn't you like about it? would you mind giving some constructive feedback? what metaphors didn't you understand? if you weren't looking to review this to review it, ...

All of the capitalization was VERY intentional. If you'll notice, everything "wrongly" capitalized" is a bigger concept than it appears if I had not capitalized it. It makes the abstract ...

All of the capitalization was VERY intentional. If you'll notice, everything "wrongly" capitalized" is a bigger concept than it appears if I had not capitalized it. It makes the abstract ...