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most of these questions, especially about joyce's character, will be answered in time. I've made certain stylistic choices (like the numbers and parenthesis) consciously, and I'm sticking with them. S

whoops, originally there were five, but then I cut one. I agree with the unknown thing. I'm glad you like the magical sheep shenanigans :P They make it hard for ...

Is that a good reaction? o.o

whoops that last part shouldn't have all been in a review box. And I forgot to thank you for the review!

Perfectly white teeth is only happening in movies, Widder. In real life(even though this is fantasy) That's right, this is fantasy, and I do know people with perfectly white teeth. ...

Get used to formal dialogue mahahaha! I always have problems with beginnings. This actually started off as a writing doodle to talk about eating an apple, so obviously much more ...

First of all, this isn't a prologue, and I absolutely hate info dumps in the first chapter (the parts where you detail what kind of world the story takes place ...

Totally understandable. You did a good job at what you aimed to do then. ^^

That quoted section was just a typo; thanks for fixing it! I've honestly never used the m-dashes for action breaks in quotes, and I feel like I haven't seen it ...

Ooh yay you got my subtle pun!! (even though there aren't eight /feet/ per se, but I really don't feel like writing sixteen syllables in a line xD) I was ...

It's coo. It's all coo. *is a pigeon*

Yes, it's enjambment, but it's more than that because of the expectation for what the word means, but it actually means something else in the context. I'm glad you know ...

First of all, whoever told you that every line in poetry has to be capitalized is wrong. I'm sorry they decieved you, but I'm here to set things right. Not ...

8th reply is a new record for me I think. Maybe I should just take that part out because it's really not needed and if it's causing this much confusion, ...

Wait now I'm confused.