Ronald559

Is there another chapter out yet?

Thank you for your amazing review. Quite different from the first great review. I really appreciate all the feedback. " and I had to look back and reread more than ...

What in the world is an asexual writer, and an sexual romance writer? I agree with you. Fancy words for the sake of being fancier. It doesn't feel organic. It's ...

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Wow, thank you for the review. It was really helpful. I'm beginning my major in english. So I'm not too comfortable with all the rules yet. So I'm very grateful ...

I believe them 100%. I stand by with what I said. It's hard to know sometimes, I hope I'm a little good. And that's it not all in my head. ...

That's how I write sometimes. Just dialogue and fill in the blanks I saw in my head later. Trying narrating/describing things in real life. Not on paper just aloud when ...

Your dialogue is your strong suit. I laughed a lot, thanks. The description is always lazy though. There's nothing to critique really because the bulk of the story is dialogue. ...

Yea, I gotcha.

It was!! Very helpful... thanks. Also thought you should know The Land of Milk and Honey is a synonym for the Promised Land.

It was originally a much larger paragraph but this other writer told me I had no talent. And my writing was pointless without saying it as harsh. He kept asking ...

oh okay cool, will do.

By the way, so you missed this from the first paragraph, and the hanging post with two grey figures moving in the dry wind. or are you saying, you want ...

I have a very similar concept that applies to a main character that's not in this scene. I want the reader to know what it looks like for that last ...

Awesome, thanks for reading and reviewing! I'll think about the first line, I agree with you. Common is the name of the town. Mostly for people to just grasp the ...