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Re: Pain and Love
My heart has been ripped out, and the pitiful, tattered thing has been smeared across the walls of my soul. I think this is probably moving into the realm of ...
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: her heart will bleed
i liked the riming and all If there is once place on earth where this is appropriate, it's here. It's "rhyming."
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: Authorship
Two things: 1. I adore "Sentiments cease to make sense" 2. It was lovely.
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: Follow me
Why is it that bored people always write really emo poems?
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: Lost Innocence
To me, the substance of this poem was not in the words. The words, to me, were all things I'd heard before to describe rape.
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: Suicide announced as "Died Alone"
I liked the title, but it seemed needlessly depressing to me.
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: Burning Gaia VII
Pretty neat. I'm a sucker for elegant character description, which you have, and you definitely took advantage of what you've given yourself. Exciting, too.
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: Clone
The beginning is a bit blunt, but yeah. The dialogue is nice. There's not a whole lot to review here, but it seems like a good something.
Sep 27, 2007 -
Re: More of a Concept
It isn't a complete sentence. And it is a term that is used. Hazmat suit. It's those big white things with tubes coming out of the neck that the police ...
Jul 19, 2007 -
Re: More of a Concept
And I could just look hazmat up in the dictionary except I am lazy and also mozilla spell check doesn't pick it up. Is it a word? . It's an ...
Jul 19, 2007 -
Re: Reunion
I like complex rhyme schemes... Its: ABABCCDDD and the last line is repeated in every stanza.
Jul 13, 2007 -
Re: Vampire
Maybe rhyme crypt with ripped or dipped?
Jul 13, 2007 -
Re: Reunion
He got a bachelors degree from brown university and talks about it like he graduated a little while ago and still has his whole life ahead of him. He calls ...
Jul 13, 2007
