I wrote this because I wanted to write a poem with a descending number of syllables in each line that also made sense.
=P
Count Down
Anticipation gradually grows;
All eyes are looking at the launch pad.
As the countdown goes down, time slows.
Technicians hazmat suit-clad.
Ignition will come soon,
Just around the bend
Ship to the moon
Will ascend
Countdown
End
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Clau: a hazmat suit is something officials wear when they have to deal with, of course, hazardous materials; in the context, it makes perfect sense. ^~
Rigel: I liked this! The descending syllable format worked well here, to my surprise; I'll admit that when I read your foreword I had my doubts. I'm glad you allayed them. ^^ I, too, think you're lacking something with the punctuation; I probably would have punctuated it like this:
But that's just an idea. ^~
Be well, do good work, and keep in touch.
I tried this once a few years back and the format makes for a cute little poem. Your topic was much more original than mine though and the rhyming is a nice touch. Your punctuation seems to dwindle as you reach the end which makes it a little harder to read but that's easily fixed.
It isn't a complete sentence. And it is a term that is used. Hazmat suit. It's those big white things with tubes coming out of the neck that the police use when there's a biohazard scare. They use them at NASA to avoid contaminating things.
=P I should search things more.
Maybe it is just that it isn't punctuated, but if I expand the line:
Technicians hazmat suit-clad
Technicians hazardous material suit-clad, etcetera
It still doesn't make much sense to me.
It's an abbreviation for "Hazardous Materials"
HA! That was pretty good. Swift, to the point, blunt. I especially like the part about hazmat. Very good. Was it inspired by a lift off?
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-Kylan
I think it was neat ^_^ I do request more punctuation though!
And I could just look hazmat up in the dictionary except I am lazy and also mozilla spell check doesn't pick it up. Is it a word?
If you could add more imagery, I think I wold enjoy this more. For a cute little test, it was neat.