Riedawriter23

Your imagery is really beautiful. I felt like I was looking at the scene. Then a tear extinguished it, and the steam tapped the glass politely, whispering, “Do not escape ...

Hello! :) We killed the town together. One by one they went down and the eulogy for each was short and sweet. Something none of them had ever experienced before. ...

I really liked this. At first I think that the format sort of took away from the beauty of the poem but then I just sort of forgot about the ...

Firstly, Welcome to YWS! :) Now for the critique. The first thing that I noticed what that you had absolutely no format. You must have at least some flow and ...

I agree with the above comments. It's a good idea, but it's been done too many times before. Add yourself into it. We want to know what you feel, not ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! :) Checking out of routine I postpone the hour to dream. **I don't think that this was forced. It looks like is should be but once ...

Hello! :) I'm going to review this with Via's punctuation corrections to make it easier. Don't you realize you're my hero? Can't you see why I love you so? **These ...

This was good...though we actually do have a song lyrics forum here and that's where this poem belongs. The rating is G. I'll contact a poetry mod for you so ...

Welcome to YWS! :) Okay, the first think I realized about this poem is that...though the contents suggest dramatic poetry the whole style and flow say lyric poetry. I was ...

I actually like your choppy style. I get a lot of different emotions from this and even though I have to reread it to interpret what it almost seems right ...

Hello welcome to the site! :) I thought your english was pretty good. The poem was wonderful, especially the ending. I'll make corrections as needed: Could you hear the voice ...

The first thing that I noticed was that it felt like you were talking moreso than the words flowing. Instead try to show us what you're talking about. Also, as ...

Okay. Yes. It is true what the other have said. But I really want to rewrite this just to see what it looks like and then correct it? I'm sure ...

First thing first, you need punctuation. Right in the beginning I was gasping for breath. Just to make the overall poem flow better, you have to have more than just ...

Cold winds attacked her in all directions as she made a slow attempt to get home. Her long, brown hair whipped around and hit her face. She wished that she ...